Some of us may encounter this incredibly difficult and volatile situation in life. The way it ends, well that is what varies. Quick heads up, I have not experienced this.
Stereotypical male: "Honey, is there something wrong?"
Troubled female: "Yes actually..."
Stereotypical male: "Well, are you going to tell me?"
Troubled female: "Will you promise not to get angry?"
Stereotypical male: "Of course, I promise."
Troubled female: "I'm pregnant."
Stereotypical male: "Why would I get mad? That's great news!"
Troubled female: "It isn't yours..."
Stereotypical male: "......."
Troubled female: "Darling? Are you okay?"
The following scene is too graphic and/or unpredictable to be written for the audience. Due to the flexibility of the situation, comment your possible endings to the situation. It could be serious, funny, dark, a happy ending, anything really, I'm just curious to see what people will come up with.
Side note: I'm thinking about beginning a weekly story for this blog, comment with ideas for stories or tales and I will do my best, I even might make one long continuous story with weekly updates. Who knows?
I liked the idea of the conversation because it's really funny how much that happens and could lead into a great story but the problem was that it didn't lead into a story so it kind of just cut the reader off like you want to know what happened which could be great if you had a "to be continued..." which could make your readers come back to find out what happened but without it your readers might think that you'll leave every story unfinished.
ReplyDeleteHonestly I was just a little lazy with this one. Plus that situation could get not school appropriate really quickly, and I wanted to avoid that.
DeleteI liked how you allowed for the readers to use their imagination throughout the dialogue, and the tone that you used contributed to your piece. However, I felt it was a little vague, and maybe could have used more of an ending or beginning. Overall, I thought it was a great piece, using a somewhat sarcastic tone like that can make the reader enjoy the text more.
ReplyDeleteI, actually, did not enjoy that you let readers chose an ending. I feel like there is too much a mix of very formal speech but also very colloquial language. I understand the comical, sarcastic tone of your own thoughts, but I didn't feel it fit for the conversation. But I loved the actual conversation, though it was short. It makes you giggle and smile, which is great. Maybe you could add to the conversation and add something more potent as a final idea.
ReplyDeleteA serial story? Hmmm, that sounds like a very interesting idea. I wonder, would you be open to a traveling story? In other words, a story that is written over many blogs with the audience having to follow along? Perhaps the parts being interchangeable? Hmmm. thoughts abrewing.
ReplyDeleteThat's essentially the idea. I want to start as soon as possible, unfortunately I never have more than ten minutes to myself to actually start.
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